lukedelmege wrote:

cactus flower wrote:

cactus flower wrote:

lukedelmege wrote:

Never truly been a fan of the 'Haiku' or seventeen syllable poem but one in particular always delighted me.


TO-CON-VEY-ONE'S-MOOD-IN-SEV-EN-TEEN-SYLL-A-BLES-IS-VER-Y-DIFF-IC

John Cooper Clarke

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lukedelmege - have you tried these haikus - (Michael Hartnett)


Certainly will give them a look.



http://vids.myspace.com/index.cfm?fuseaction=vids.individual&VideoID=2747223

Haiku wrapped in sandpaper, eh?

This is a haiku
It is fun to create them
As poetic tests.

Had I the heavens' embroidered cloths,
Enwrought with golden and silverlight,
The blue and the dim and the dark cloths
Of night and light and the half-light,
I would spread the cloths under your feet:
But I, being poor, have only my dreams;
I have spread my dreams under your feet;
Tread softly because you tread on my dreams.

W.B. Yeats

There was a young man of Devizes
Whose ears were of different sizes
One was so small
It was no use at all
But the other was huge and won prizes


Is it poetry? I say it is.

The
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The
The

Any comments on my new poem

Auditor #9 wrote:

The
The
The
The

Any comments on my new poem

It's short but not as short as HRH Prince of Wales when asked how his latest Polo match had gone,

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Auditor #9 wrote:

The
The
The
The

Any comments on my new poem

Decided to re-write your effort for the Yorkshire market,

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Doesn't really work if I'm being honest?

johnfás wrote:

Had I the heavens' embroidered cloths,
Enwrought with golden and silverlight,
The blue and the dim and the dark cloths
Of night and light and the half-light,
I would spread the cloths under your feet:
But I, being poor, have only my dreams;
I have spread my dreams under your feet;
Tread softly because you tread on my dreams.

W.B. Yeats

There's a great musical characteristic to that poem there, johnfás.

Ard-Taoiseach wrote:

This is a haiku
It is fun to create them
As poetic tests.

*furiously clicks fingers together*

lukedelmege wrote:

Auditor #9 wrote:

The
The
The
The

Any comments on my new poem

Decided to re-write your effort for the Yorkshire market,

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Doesn't really work if I'm being honest?

Ha! Are you from yoaksheer? I don't know the accent enough to know how to pronounce 'the' but you know in ireland it's 'deh'. (I'm trying to imagine Jack Sugden saying it )

cookiemonster wrote:

Ard-Taoiseach wrote:

This is a haiku
It is fun to create them
As poetic tests.

*furiously clicks fingers together*

Yes cookie?

Auditor #9 wrote:

lukedelmege wrote:

Auditor #9 wrote:

The
The
The
The

Any comments on my new poem

Decided to re-write your effort for the Yorkshire market,

"



"

Doesn't really work if I'm being honest?

Ha! Are you from yoaksheer? I don't know the accent enough to know how to pronounce 'the' but you know in ireland it's 'deh'. (I'm trying to imagine Jack Sugden saying it )

I think the Yorkshire definite article is pronounced as a swift "tuh".

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I think the Yorkshire definite article is pronounced as a swift "tuh".

It's time to go down tet woolpack ..

Auditor #9 wrote:

lukedelmege wrote:

Auditor #9 wrote:

The
The
The
The

Any comments on my new poem

Decided to re-write your effort for the Yorkshire market,

"



"

Doesn't really work if I'm being honest?

Ha! Are you from yoaksheer? I don't know the accent enough to know how to pronounce 'the' but you know in ireland it's 'deh'. (I'm trying to imagine Jack Sugden saying it )

Actually that's exactly how Jack would say it, being as the actor who played him (cough, according to the wife) maybe Jack Hormby, died a few months ago.

Not from Yorkshire myself, no.

He'd pronounce it 'deh' like the irish people? Or: Seth? I think it's time for pint int woolpack ?

Is your man dead though, Jack? He wasn't that old, surely. I associate him from my childhood after school - Bosco, Emerdale Farm etc.

If we'd known he was dead we could have put him in our graveyard Not every forum has a graveyard you know - ours is to be found on the portal down to the bottom right hand side. Ignore the big white space in the middle - it fills up from time to time.

Other forums don't have such elasticity of white space which I try to fill up with Chinese flags and other pictures.

Auditor #9 wrote:

He'd pronounce it 'deh' like the irish people? Or: Seth? I think it's time for pint int woolpack ?

Is your man dead though, Jack? He wasn't that old, surely. I associate him from my childhood after school - Bosco, Emerdale Farm etc.

If we'd known he was dead we could have put him in our graveyard Not every forum has a graveyard you know - ours is to be found on the portal down to the bottom right hand side. Ignore the big white space in the middle - it fills up from time to time.

Other forums don't have such elasticity of white space which I try to fill up with Chinese flags and other pictures.

The Minister for Internal Affairs confirms his untimely demise.

I love this by Kíla - it qualifies as poetry

Bí Ann
Bí ann
Bí liom
Bí gasta
Bí cróga
Bí cliste
Bí glic
Bí grámhar, gealgáireach
Bí sochair laistigh
Bí doimhin ach bí éadrom
Gan teannas ar bith
I do chorp
I do chroí
I do cheann
Ins an tslí
Ina chuireann tú tú fhéin I láthair
I pé comhluadar ina bhfuil tú
Bí ann liom
Bí láidir ildána nuair a chasann an domhain
Bí ann dom
Agus buailfidh muid le chéile nuair
a thagann an t-am

Ah, much as I need to catch up with TV3 news and Oireachtas Report (pork!) tonight, I really cannot let Tuesday 9th go by without mentioning JOHN MILTON !! It was his 400th birthday anniversary today, I believe.

Am a Donne fan myself, but I remember reading Lycidas, Paradise Lost and Comus in school. I'll post a bit more over the next couple of days ( famous last words with me, I know! but ...)

... anyway, English Republican, poet and dissident - Salut!

Kate P wrote:

I love this by Kíla - it qualifies as poetry

Bí Ann
Bí ann
Bí liom
Bí gasta
Bí cróga
Bí cliste
Bí glic
Bí grámhar, gealgáireach
Bí sochair laistigh
Bí doimhin ach bí éadrom
Gan teannas ar bith
I do chorp
I do chroí
I do cheann
Ins an tslí
Ina chuireann tú tú fhéin I láthair
I pé comhluadar ina bhfuil tú
Bí ann liom
Bí láidir ildána nuair a chasann an domhain
Bí ann dom
Agus buailfidh muid le chéile nuair
a thagann an t-am

Kate, this sounds beautiful. Have only just seen this, not having visited the thread for a while.
I do not know the poet (?) and can only understand some (maybe a quarter to a half) of the words, but I want to know more.

Could some of our Irish speakers post a translation? Many thanks.

I'll have a half a shot at this one

Atticus wrote:

Kate P wrote:

I love this by Kíla - it qualifies as poetry

Bí Ann "Be there"
Bí ann Be there
Bí liom Be with me
Bí gasta ?
Bí cróga ?
Bí cliste Be cute ?
Bí glic Be clever
Bí grámhar, gealgáireach Be giggly ?
Bí sochair laistigh ?
Bí doimhin ach bí éadrom Be serious and flippant ???
Gan teannas ar bith Without being ____ at all
I do chorp In your body
I do chroí In your heart
I do cheann In your head
Ins an tslí In the way
Ina chuireann tú tú fhéin I láthair That you bear (?) yourself usually
I pé comhluadar ina bhfuil tú ?
Bí ann liom Be there with me
Bí láidir ildána nuair a chasann an domhain Be strong and cheeky (?) when the world ____
Bí ann dom Be there for me
Agus buailfidh muid le chéile nuair and we'll hang around together (?) as the time goes by
a thagann an t-am

Kate, this sounds beautiful. Have only just seen this, not having visited the thread for a while.
I do not know the poet (?) and can only understand some (maybe a quarter to a half) of the words, but I want to know more.

Could some of our Irish speakers post a translation? Many thanks.

'a thagann and t-am' - when the time comes????

Thanks Audi!! I appreciate your quick response. I like it. Suits my mood. Look forward to the last very few words.

... so now I'm feeling a leetle bit guilty 'bout not brushing up my German, my Irish, my Polish plus I want to learn Latin! ...

Aragon wrote:

'a thagann and t-am' - when the time comes????

Go raibh maith agat!

Who is Kila? will google tomorrow.

Atticus wrote:

Aragon wrote:

'a thagann and t-am' - when the time comes????

Go raibh maith agat!

Who is Kila? will google tomorrow.

Tá fáilte romhat.

Kila is an afro-celtic band
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=BRaRBeBgzps

Milton is someone we don't read enough of I suppose - I managed to avoid a lot of his stuff in college but there was no avoiding Andrew Marvell which wasn't so bad. Both were around the time of the mighty English Civil War ...

Ah now Marvell was good! Even the religious order in my secondary school couldn't disguise the unmistakable sexuality in his poetry. All that dripping wet fruit and what not?!